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“Is this rain or snow?” she asks.  My windshield wipers aren’t quite keeping up enough to be able to see what is falling before it hits.

I kick them into high gear. “Rain, I think,” I tell her.  “At least for now.”

The sun is setting somewhere behind us and we are headed back down the hill for the second time today.

“Does it only rain on bad days?”

I pause to think for a minute.  “It rained on the day you were born.”

“Oh.” Optimism creeps into her voice.

And then without missing a beat, I say,   “And it rained on the day my dad died. ”

“Oh.”

Dammit.  Why’d I say that?  “And, it snowed on the day they took out your dad’s brain tumor.”

“It did?” She was only six then.

“Yep.”

“So, if this is…”

“Yep, if this is, then this–” I nod to the view in front of us, “this is a good sign.” I look out past the rain-splashed windshield and see that is true: “And I don’t think any of those days had a rainbow.”

“Oh.” She is nearly twelve now.

I feel the sunshine warm the knuckles of my left hand through the glass beside me. I relax my grip on the wheel just a little. “The sun is trying.”  She looks back over her shoulder and we both take a deep breath.

“Do you think you know when you’re in a rainbow?” she asks.

“I don’t know.  Could we be in one right now?”

“Hmm,” she thinks about it, staring out the window.

We saw one more rainbow on our way to the ER last night. One for the clear CAT scan results that were waiting when we arrived.  And one for the clear MRI that came after the sky had fallen dark and the rain had turned to snow.

“So, if this isn’t…”

“I know.  If this isn’t,  then I don’t know.”


I am participating in the 11th annual Slice of Life Story Challenge (#SOLSC18) hosted by Two Writing Teachers.  We write each day (except–for me–for yesterday) in March as part of an international writing community.  I appreciate any comments, especially those thatslice of life challenge

  • reinforce writing decisions that work and
  • coach into those that don’t.

Think of each comment you leave as a little writing conference we are having together. Come on, make me a better writer today! Thank you!

 

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14 Comments Add yours

  1. It’s amazing how much is said even when you’re not saying it. The way you weave the story into the conversation is very powerful in this piece. I can feel the weight of everything that’s happening, especially in your last line. I’m so sorry you’re going through this and will pray for better days ahead. Thank you for sharing.

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  2. You have me wondering what is it. I like how you used the flashback moments to understand where you are coming from.

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    1. Morgan says:

      We are still wondering ourselves. Might be seizures. Either way, another chapter unfolds.

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  3. Lisa Corbett says:

    Hooray for clear MRI and CT scan news. I like the connections you share. I also like the cliffhanger sentences. Sometimes in tough conversations there are pauses while people try to put their thoughts into words and I think your post reflects those.

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  4. showgem says:

    What a great conversation sharing moments & connecting with the weather.

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  5. Natasha says:

    The sparseness of the dialogue and descriptions make the story feel so powerful–there’s so much unsaid to haunt readers.

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  6. That made me ball my eyes out in all of the ways. You are an excellent writer. (And Mom, and partner/soulmate)

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    1. Morgan says:

      Thank you. It took me awhile to find the way into and through this one in a way I could stand.

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  7. carwilc says:

    Wow, wow, wow! The combination of dialogue and weather in this one are so powerful! I hope everything is ok and the situation gets resolved really soon!

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  8. bjdonaldson says:

    I am so glad I stopped by to read this slice. It was so masterfully written and kept my attention throughout. That being said, the story gripped me, too. I’m so happy for your “rainbows!” Just as an aside, I was crushed at my Papa’s and Father’s funerals…both had rainbows in the sky after the service. God is good. Thanks for the wonderful slice.

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  9. Thanks for this. I appreciated the space between what the speakers said.

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  10. The way you use the contrast of rain & snow to emphasize the conversation back and forth between positive and negative is very masterful! As a reader, I appreciated the small glimpses you gave us into your thoughts and feelings (the line of internal dialogue, the slight relaxing of your grip) in addition to the words you were saying. Hope everything gets figured out soon!

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  11. Masterful storytelling through the car ride dialogue about the weather and so much more. You write about a heavy topic with such grace; your thoughtful brevity and white space speaks volumes. Wishing you and your family well.

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